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Showering 'Neath the Falls

Purifying drops Cascade down the maiden's back 'Neath the falls she bathes

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Carol Louise Moon

Date: 8/22/2020 11:17:00 AM

I love this haiku, and not just for the really cool image. I like that for line 2, one thinks of water "cascading down rock" But here, "cascading down back" and yet, there is an echo of rock and back that makes this haiku even more intriguing. Well-done.

Mahtab Bangalee

Date: 8/19/2020 4:13:00 AM

expressive..fantastic

Kash Poet

Date: 5/27/2011 10:49:00 AM

Visiting your old archives.Wonderful Haiku here Carolyn....I can visualise that bathing maiden..

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/15/2010 2:48:00 PM

Very interesting write that would cool one off on a summer day and would really be cold on a winter one..I can see the scene..Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work..Sara

Gert W. Knop

Date: 5/31/2010 8:53:00 AM

Loved your fresh Haiku, enjoyed reading it today, Carolyn! But there is really no need to become a vegetarian, although sometimes a vegetarian meal is just a nice change (especially with an Indian dish). I myself prefer poultry and fish...Enjoy your meals!!!...Love, Gert

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/15/2010 4:10:00 PM

Had to go way back to find one I had not read yet!! I really love this image. WEll, on Idol, that was sad. I hoped that two guys would go out. AT least they got andrew right. haha. It's gonna get sad now. Many good ones will be going home! LUv, andrea

Nicole Sharon Brown

Date: 1/13/2010 1:37:00 PM

Love the picture of the old school bathtub in this haiku! Terrific write!

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 1/10/2010 2:37:00 PM

nice picture here..funny after a nice Haiku like this one...how your imagination takes over with the rest of that scenery and sound.I took a nice little trip there. That's a really nice place! -Thanks. -Robert

Mary Meade Stephenson

Date: 12/8/2009 7:16:00 PM

what a picture you have painted here....beautiful!! Thanks so much for sharing and for your kind comments~Mary

Brian Strand

Date: 11/5/2009 12:32:00 AM

Carolyn thanks for your welcome comments today.Rgds Brian

Hana Ryusaka

Date: 10/31/2009 12:57:00 PM

Very pretty images! Great job here =]

Caroline Cécile Delacroix

Date: 10/24/2009 10:00:00 PM

Very nice Haiku. What a beautiful picture you painted. Thanks for sharing and thank you for your great comments on my poem. Love, Caroline

Gert W. Knop

Date: 10/22/2009 2:44:00 PM

I painted some waterfalls some years ago and even sold some at an art exhibition in Vanuatu. Now my drawings and paintigs are well distributed araound the world. Lovely your haiku! Although I am very busy now with packing my things, I will try my best to post new poems on soup. Love, Gert

Danny Nunn

Date: 10/13/2009 1:54:00 PM

Water falls don't see many in this old dry desert, great write..Thanks on Ocotillo, really it looks like an old dead stick with thorns, but that is it's mask....Danny

Margaret Okubo

Date: 10/12/2009 9:23:00 AM

Picturesque and an excellent Haiku. Thank you for this excellent verse. Meg.

Chacko Itticheria

Date: 10/12/2009 8:54:00 AM

Lot of imagination Carolyn,Very beautiful haiku. You give a lot to the reader to enjoy,you did it in just three short lines.Thanks for your comment on my poetry. Best wishes Chacko

Matthew Anish

Date: 10/12/2009 7:43:00 AM

Let me add myself to the "chorus" of praise for your poem. I love waterfalls and you offer a nice little tribute to one in this poem. Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish

Elaine George

Date: 10/11/2009 4:00:00 PM

Beautiful, Carolyn. Love, Lainie

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 10/11/2009 10:54:00 AM

I love how you depicted the falls--You have such a wonderful talent with words...wishing you all the best in Raul's contest :) Come to think of it, the falls do remind me of cascading hair too...thank you again for your inspiring comments on my poem, it really made me smile to read it :)

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 10/11/2009 9:30:00 AM

This isa gem and if its for Raul's contest,this is A WINNER--lovely Caroline,awesome write,to my favs-Charma

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 10/11/2009 8:24:00 AM

I have read your excellent poetry today and enjoyed it. Thank you Carolyn. I hope you are enjoying your weekend. Love, Carol

James Peranteau

Date: 10/11/2009 6:26:00 AM

Carolyn my Dear,..this is quite the Haiku maiden !!!!! I really love this ! I visualized you creating some really great Haiku's Carolyn,...I was right ! You are one fantastic poet ! Into mine fav's it goes ! james

James Fraser

Date: 10/11/2009 6:02:00 AM

Beautiful Haiku Carolyn, i need to visit these cascading waters, and hopefully find the maiden neath the falls. A delightful picture your words paint >> James

William Kershaw

Date: 10/11/2009 2:15:00 AM

Carolyn, Inspiring words. Now you've made me enter this contest. Love, Will

Brian Strand

Date: 10/11/2009 12:59:00 AM

Best wishes with this Carolyn.Thank you for your kind and encouraging words.Rgds Brin