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I have contemplated more on this piece, and am given to understand that senryu tend more to the satirical
also the above does have seasonal content though not in the 1st line..' as it is a contemplative write I must
revert its genre to the haiku, which I did originally place it under I make this revision on the 28th 10th 2015
The reflective aspects, are the porcelain bowl, imagine also a rising moon.' this would cast a sickle shadow
at the bowl base, another moon stage that will be.' yet now is not.. Also the current moon is round like the
bowl the tounge is pink, the blossom is pink chablis refers to the shade of the sake, and the tast to me has
a metal brackish taste as it blossoms on the tounge.' as you may already know the sake from noritake speaks of the liquid and the bowl I have shown all of this write & I won't do this ever again
I only did it because I had expanded it 80 percent already..' all the best Joe.' 10 2 2017